• Teacher Essay Notes

     

    Rough Draft 1A –Graphic Organizer and Quick Write #1

     

    positive attitude, passionate, sense of humor, motivational/ inspirational, encouraging/ challenges, patience, teach at a good pace/extra time, firm but fair, discipline/ stern, allows me to be responsible/ held accountable for choices and actions, intelligent on subject matter/ educated, offers security/ safe environment, shows kindness/ compassion, understanding/ sympathy/ empathy, listens to me/ attentive to my needs, trustworthy/ reliable, relatable, resourceful, *organized (teacher example), prepared, task-oriented, focused, flexibility, forgiving/doesn't hold grudges, confidence, determination, equality/ open-minded, no favoritism, professional, hands on activities, creative/artistic/imaginative, fun/entertaining assignments/ varied teaching, energetic, supportive/helpful

    Autobiographical Incident-I,me,my,mine

     

    Rough Draft 1B- 3-5 topics/ claim/incident

              *Why they are important: to be a successful student explanation/response

                1. Why is this trait important to you? explanation/ response

                2. How does this trait help you to be a successful student?closing

    Ex: 1. Organized

    1.-       a)The teacher won't lose my papers/ tests/ projects and make me do them over again [or a zero/red square]

             b)  -Waste of learning time for me when the teacher is not organized [lose trust in the abilities of the teacher] I learn more, use time wisely, be organized like them.

             c) -Teacher is a positive role model, therefore I can be better organized. Ex: set up binder- dividers, spiral notebook, etc... 

             d) -  A clean classroom keeps me calm ( can use the quote here instead) "A cluttered desk/backpack/Binder=a cluttered mind"

             e)- The teacher won't mess up my scheduling and planning

             f)- When not organized, incomplete tasks leads me to unfinished lessons. (Teach the wrong lesson)

             g) -The teacher won't mix up the grades in the gradebook/ Aeries

     

     

    Create word family: clean, neat, tidy, calm, smooth, found, positive, role-model, on task, on schedule, stress-free, learning, benefit, up-to-date, aware, trust, balanced, safe, secure, up-to-date

     

    Order of Preference (1 is the most important)

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    What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?/ Rough Draft 1B Closings 

    closing to the claim-How does this trait help me to be a successful student? 

    Objective: close/conclude each claim. Make sure each closing sounds unique. Do not repeat the phrase over, but instead word it specifically for each claim. Use the back if necessary. 

    (Little 2) 2. Teacher example: Organized 

    This topic helps me be successful by learning from the positive traits the teacher displays with organization. It will help me be more organized in the future. Ex: high school, college, job, career, family, life. 

     

     

    What Qualities Make a Teacher Great/ Rough Draft 1C Part 1 and 2 

    Rough Draft 1C/ Part 1- personal experiences evidence/ response pronounsI, Me, My, Mine 

    (2 personal experiences- positive or negative- use proactive language only)  

    Part 2- Rough Draft1C/Part 2- evidence/response 

     *How does this experience affect me? Initial reaction (happened right away)  

    *How has these experiences helped shape who I am today? hindsight (happened after reflection) (What was the original intention?) 

    Is it a positive outcome or negative? 

    Ex: 1. Organized  

    - Mrs. Yung- positive + (Part 1) 

    1. 1.Gives tips on how to organize my binders. Ex: dividers, folders, have enough room, web page
    2. Gradebook updated-back up gradebook/ no loss of assignments

     “There is no blackhole in the classroom.”- Mrs. Yung 

    1. Clean orderly classroom- labeled boxes, space for everything, neat desk

    “a cluttered desk = a cluttered mind.”- Mrs. Yung 

    1. Negative marks are present on the board
    2. Requires proper heading onall papers/ passed up by rows/ clipped at the end and rubber-banded 
    3. Displays time management/ doesn’t waste time/ plans ahead/ transition-segue without an interruption/ on task
    4. Agenda binder and agenda are present/ specific order/ has class secretary

     

    Turn into a paragraph about 3-5 sentences 

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

    1. Part 1 Trait experience #1  

     

    Part 2 

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    1. Part 1 Trait experience #2 

     

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    1. Part 1 Trait experience #1 

     

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    What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?/ Rough Draft 1D- Introductions and Conclusions 

    Objective: create a strong introduction and conclusion for the entire essay 

    Introduction (hook/entice/draw in/lure your reader/ grab the attention of the reader) Remember you can hook an audience with action, reaction, and/or dialogue 

     and 

    Conclusion/ Closing/ Reflection (completes your essay/ satisfies your reader-dark chocolate!) 

    1. Basic (hamburger/ pepperoni pizza) $- Very straightforwardlanguage

    1I Great teachers have important qualities. Some qualities that make a teacher great are… 

    1C These are qualities that I think make a great teacher. All of these qualities are important to me because…(ice-cream) 

    1. Refined (steak and lobster) $$$$

    2I Having a teacher that a student thinks is great could really have a positive impact on the student’s education. In order to be a great teacher, you must do or have these qualities: 

    2C To be a great teacher you must obtain these qualities…All these examples lead to one notion- a great teacher. (soufflé) 

    1. Figurative(chips and salsa) $$-$$$$

    3I The qualities that make a teacher great are really just five main keys. 

    3C Those are, in my opinion, are the five keys that help [for] me. (banana spilt) 

    Create examples of each set: Don't forget to identify key words and phrases to match the writing style 

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

    Basic 

     I-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    C-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    Refined 

     I-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    C-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    Figurative 

    I-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    C-1-2 sentences 

     

     

    After #3 on binder paper 

    Full Introduction 4-7 sentences  

    Full Conclusion 4-7 sentences 

    *Write whatever writing style you choose-the one that feels natural to you. Make sure you stay consistent throughout the essay.  

    *Remember: Figurative will use allegories, analogies, metaphors.  

    *Keep in mind that a conclusion will allow the reader to know what you learned from this experience and why it matters to you. 

     

     

     

    What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?/ Rough Draft 1E 

    Objective: put A-D together in an organized form. Construct/build your essay/ put it all together! Follow this formula. 

      

    1D-Introduction 

      

    1st trait #1 (claim) each claim is about 3-4 paragraphs 

      Topic Sentence for trait 

      1B (#1) (little) 

      1C (both parts 1&2) 

      1B (#2) closing 

      

    2nd trait #2 (claim) each claim is about 3-4 paragraphs 

    Topic Sentence for trait 

      1B (#1) (little) 

      1C (both parts 1&2) 

      1B (#2) closing 

       

      3rd trait #3 (claim) each claim is about 3-4 paragraphs 

    Topic Sentence for trait 

      1B (#1) (little) 

      1C (both parts 1&2) 

      1B (#2) closing 

      

     

     

    4th trait #4 (claim) each claim is about 3-4 paragraphs 

    Topic Sentence for trait 

      1B (#1) (little) 

      1C (both parts 1&2) 

      1B (#2) closing 

      

    5th trait #5 (claim) each claim is about 3-4 paragraphs 

    Topic Sentence for trait 

      1B (#1) (little) 

      1C (both parts 1&2) 

      1B (#2) closing 

      

      

    (After last trait) 

    1D- Conclusion-dark chocolate! You did it☺ 

    Notes on Rough Draft 2A
    Objective: Turn Rough Draft 1E- completed into 2A by typing it following the word processing notes in MLA format.
    *tip- treat this as your final product.
    Title: What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?/ Rough Draft 2A-due 12/10
    This will start our Writer's Workshop.
    Note: you must have a completed typed 2A to participate in Writer's Workshop. Please be advised:No late work!
     

    Notes on Rough Draft 2B

    2A into 2B

    Turn Rough Draft 2A completed into 2B by typing it following the word processing [MLA Format] notes. Use the MLA Format layout instead of a blank document. The document will be saved as Teacher Essay  last name (your last name)  2B

    Ex: Teacher Essay Yung 2B. 

    Copy and paste 2A into a new document MLA Format. Control A to Control C to new document Control V. You should have 2 documents.

     

    Take the feedback under advisement and reflect if you agree. Improve your essay based on the revisions suggested to you. Remember: you don't have to follow the editor's advice; however, make sure you follow my (Mrs. Yung) expectations based on your notes. Your reader/editor is the filter before me (Mrs. Yung).

    Tip- Treat this as a final product!

    Title: What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?:Rough Draft 2B

    Due 12/18/19

    Note: you must have a completed typed 2B to participate in Writer's Workshop. Please be advised:No late work!
     

    Notes for: Final Draft-turning 2B into Final Draft

     

    Title: "What Qualities Make a Teacher Great?" [or something more creative]

    use copy and paste notes from 2B to turn into final document

     

              -Type you essay in a FORMAL style [MLA] using the feedback and critique from your editors (2A and 2B). [ and of course, your class notes].

    Make sure you use correct format [MLA] from word processing notes.

            use your essay checklist  - use it as a writer              

     

            -You may change ideas as you see fit, but not TRAITS!

     
    Tip- This IS your FINAL product! ☺due 1/7/20
     
     
     

    Here are Rough Draft 2A instructions:

     

    EDIT Rough Draft 2A- 10 Points! [First reader]

    -sign up for paper E/B ___________ 2A Editor/1st reader [bottom of the first page]

     5 points

    1. Identify writing style: Basic, Refined, Figurative

    highlight words or phrases that identify the style (just a few, not the whole thing, about one example in each paragraph)

    -Identify the Thesis – highlight in different color

    (must be in first/introductory paragraph)

    [main point of the entire essay] writer's purpose

    *-go through each paragraph (using your notes/packet) and

    make sure ALL content is present ( BIG ITEMS)

    -add what needs to be there

    ex: How does this affect you? IC part 2

     

    USE RED PENS AND MULTI-COLORED HIGHLITERS

     

    2. Commentary [positive sandwich]- 5 points

     

    1 paragraph- positive feedback

    What you liked about the writing and essay

    Ex: vocabulary, ideas, writing style, experiences, hooked you in, left you satisfied, metaphor use, etc…

    about 3-4 sentences

     

    2. *Meat portion (longest and most in-depth)- Constructive/ critical feedback

    What the writer can improve.

    Suggestions, recommendations…

    Big Items [Engine!]

    LEVERAGE?

    about 7-10 sentences

     

    3. positive comment- ex: You are doing this, Keep it up!, Keep trying, etc…

     

    Commentary is about ½ page to one page

    Next Due date is December 18, 2019 for 2B- We do Writer's sworkshop first in order to produce our next draft.

    Here is the Rough Draft Edit 2B instructions-10 points

    sign up for paper E/B                                  2B editor/ 1st Reader

     5pts A-D

    1* A) -Review each paragraph and evaluate sentence variety + transitional words and phrases.

    highlight a few examples of examples of transitions

    -See what you can make longer or shorter - can you combine ideas?

    - Also sentence type variety ex; ?,!,.and compond/complex sentences

    highlight 2-3 compond and complex sentences

      

    B) Proofread and edit their work

           This includes...

           -Spelling

           -Grammar/Punctuation

           -Dead words(make suggestions for better words)

           (use spelling and vocabulary study guides cautiously)

           -Sentence Structure- =run-ons and fragments, etc..."Word Crimes"

      

    C) Format

           -Use word processing notes to make sure the writer is following MLA standards

       

    D) Use essay checklist

        

    2 Commentary- positive sandwich-5 points

      Materials red pen

    multi highlighters

    key-use multi color highlighters for key

    -compound complex sentences

    -transitional words and phrases

    -dead words

    -high level vocab

    red pen =feedback

     

        

       top    -What you liked                                                

           -What worked  for you   

    this includes sentence variety and length

    vocab use/ high-level words

    compound and complex sentences sentences, etc...  

    use text from the essay "   "   

                                             

     

      Meat*      constructive feedback                                                                             
            -What you can improve/suggestions                   
            -Critical Feedback                                               
            -Constructive Language 

    sentrence variety and length

    give examples of vocab and compound and complex sentences                                
                                        "   "                                                

         -Positive Comment ex; KEEP GOING!               

     

    about 1/2 page to 1 page

    2-3 paragraphs- separate them

     

    Final paper and the teacher essay packet is due January 7, 2020

     

    Break down of the grades for semester project:

    Packet-60 points

    Essay-30 points

    Editor 2A-10 points

    Editor 2B-10 points

    Total-110 points:)

     

    Table of Contents    /4

     

    1) Rough Draft 1A/Quickwrite    /6

    2) Rough Draft 1B Part 1 and 2  /6

    3) Rough Draft 1C-Part 1 and 2  both /6

    4) Rough Draft 1D   /6

    5) Rough Draft 1E and peer edit   /6

    6) Notes on editing and final draft     /6

    7) Rough Draft 2A    /10

    8) Rough Draft 2B     /10

                                     

                                   /60 Total

     

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